It was always you

You had me from the start

Even though I brushed it off like it was nothing

Letting you believe I don’t feel what you feel

Truth is, right from the start, you always had my heart

~

Best friends from the first introduction

Joking, playing, emotionally loving

With you, it was nothing less than real

May this love never end in destruction

~

I always knew you were the one

I chose to stay silent, in the end things will workout like they should and for us, it did

I have the best privilege to give all my love to you

Our love story have begun and I love you a ton

~

It was always you

From the start you had me pinned

I always knew our love was honest and true

You are my whole world, I love you


Cheers to my first poem!

I want to request honest feedback. Can you please tell me anything I have to improve, give me any tips you have, it will be deeply appreciated.

Feel welcome to give me your best qritique, I truly want to improve and grow.

Thanks for the support and thanks for reading.

Much love and abundance. Hope you are filling your life with all things that is good.

xxx

58 comments

  1. Good concept, nicely executed, Karlien. ❤ Personally, I would break that one very long line after
    "work out. " If keeping the verses to 4 lines is important to you, I would edit the line to shorten it. For example, you could say, "I chose to stay silent. Things worked out in the end."

    I hope you will continue to write poems. This one is an excellent start! ❤ Have a great week!

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  2. I love this poem, Karlien. It tugs on my heart string as it is such a beautiful expression of what we all wish for no matter what or who is the object of our affection.

    Thank you.

    Joanna

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  3. Great start! Loved the emotion. For a novice like me (who is learning to write everyday after joining wordpress🙂), it looked good. But, I have to agree with Cheryl on altering that lengthy line.
    Keep writing.❤

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  4. SMiLes
    HeART
    SPiRiT
    SoUL
    Flows
    Free Whenever
    However Wherever
    This Comes
    Natural
    Poetry
    Free
    Verse
    Life
    No Instruction
    Or Critique
    Your
    Soul
    Free
    Breath

    No

    One

    Will Ever

    Copy

    Finger

    Prints Of

    Your Soul

    No Name

    Art

    Soul

    Breathing

    Wings Free

    Butterflies

    Need

    Not

    Ask

    How To
    Dance And
    Sing

    Free

    Verse

    Wings

    Naturally

    Beautiful iNDeeD
    You Uniquely

    You

    Create

    -Butterfly

    Learns Free

    Through Wings 🦋

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  5. iNDeeD
    ‘ReaSons’

    For

    All

    Human

    SeaSons

    Water

    Waves

    Ocean

    Flows

    Art

    Lighting

    Human

    Trees in

    Colors

    New

    Truly

    Breathing

    Now If Not

    For

    Your

    Art
    This

    Art

    Doesn’t

    Exist Now

    For Giving

    Thanks

    Giving This
    With SMiLes

    Art BreatheS

    On ALWaYS Free 🙌☺️

    Liked by 3 people

  6. My blog was about a lot! Lol! Biblical studies, things I thought about, poetry, art, etc.

    I feel extremely socially awkward… maybe it’s my insecurity but I felt like nobody cared so I deleted it.

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  7. Well I exported the content but can’t get it to load. So I guess I’ve lost everything.

    Which sucks because I had some posts I loved but starting over seems good too.

    Like

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